To think that I was going to forego the beta read. I almost chose not to submit Emma Mulberry’s Whole Story to my writing group’s pool of beta readers. That would have been an incalculable loss. The beta read hash-out confab two weeks ago ranks among the best experiences I’ve had as a writer.
Yes, it was great hearing my beta readers’ takes on EMWS, what they thought the strong points were as well as where they thought the weak points were. My beta readers were an opinionated bunch. But also, it was just plain gratifying that they had read EMWS and were willing to devote an evening to its discussion.
Below is the low-down on what my betas thought about Emma Mulberry’s Whole Story.
They liked that I got in Emma’s head, but sometimes felt this came at the expense of getting to know the other characters. They got that Dad was passive, but wanted more of him so they could “get him” better. They saw a parallel between the mom’s hunger for love and attention from her father and her kids’ longing for love and attention from their dad.
They saw the character reversal—Emma becoming hard and Mom becoming soft—but thought it was too abrupt.
They thought Mom was mean and were glad when she died.
Some wondered if Jim was a pimp. Others thought he didn’t fight for Petra enough in the Del Monico’s scene. All seemed to think the Del Monico’s scene was key to Petra’s trajectory, but thought the scene was rushed and could be slowed down.
The betas liked the passion Emma displayed with regard to agate collecting, but wanted to know what else she was passionate about.
Some loved the Holiday Island section. Others found it too long.
The betas wanted more on Liza. Maybe one more scene. They wanted more on the pregnancy thing. They were getting Emma’s response to it but wanted more on the other family members’ response.
Several thought opening EMWS with the funeral scene gave away too much.